All Comments on 'Honey's Hive'

Please follow up on this awesome story

So many unanswered questions. Stephen was a guy. Now she's a girl. How do they explain that tone her parents? What happens when she doesn't show back up at her college? How is it that Brie ended up at the one place where magic is easily found? Did she know what would happen with her drink? What happens now? Will someone try to steal Steph's magic elixirs? Will they have a baby? Will a 3rd join them? Who is this professor that seems to know so much? What wI'll he say to all this?

Some of your questions I left intentionally mysterious (OOoooOOOhhh. Spooky noises). Other's I'll happily answer, which probably means I didn't do a great job in the story. (oh well) Brie thought that the potion would turn Stephen into a girl, period (she mentions something going wrong twice I think). Did Brie happen to end up at a place with magic or did the magic place happen to find her? (More spooky noises. Also this will be addressed in a separate but connected story.) Professor Doctor Magical-Know-It-All is purposely left enigmatic (he likes it that way). Stephen's current college can be handled with a few well placed emails and a phone call or two. Everything else happens in the future and isn't knowable by us mortals. Thanks for reading the story and taking the time to comment.

A neat story but it runs on a bit long. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy a long story but certain parts just seemed to drag on to the point where I was struggling to maintain interest. I found myself starting to skim after about the third page, which is not a good sign for erotic stories. On that note the other issue I had came near the ending regarding one of the sex scenes where Brie commands Stephen to cum and it works, which was hot. My issue is that Stephen then breaks down crying afterwards, it's a complete mood killer. Just too many little things that just killed my enjoyment of this story which is a shame because it has some of my favorite kinks.

This story was well put together and I would love to read more

really love to read more brilliant story , no need to fill in everything , it lets us use our imagination, l'd love to use this magic!!! . thanks for this story and for continuing forced changes . looking forward to reading more best wishes xoxo

I'd like to read more.

I very much liked this. More would be good.

I adored the romance, the characters chemistry was on point the whole way through. Even though you didn't end off on a cliffhanger, I'd love to see this story continue, possible explore the magical world the characters started interacting with in the tail end of the story. Through this, some even cazier and kinkier situations perhaps?

Author-sama, i would like to formally request a continuation to this story that follows the two of them through interactions with the magic world, and their achool life togethwr! Please and thank you

You know you have hinted so much so about this story will continue as well as have some one unruly get their hands on one of them... So I have to ask is this a 1 chapter wonder or will there be more cause I hate nothing more then when someone starts a story and never finishes it or waits years before doing the next one.

I would love to read about their first semester as roommates!!! :D

While not my normal genre..., an excellent story that could, and should be continued. I would have liked to see Stephen keep a functioning male anatomy, I mean who better to fertilize the Queen. Keep writing you do have a talent for it.

This story was amazing please make another

I need more of this story it is one of very few stories I've bookmarked.

“I shook my head, at war with my fledgling instincts. My dick ached as I felt the need to dominate Brie, to make her bow before me reverently...

I refuse!“ i wished so bad his instincts took over here and he dominated her.. sigh..

“ My proud and beautiful friend would never, should never be subjected to that. I'd rather isolate myself, than that.” the friend that changed you into whatever you are?

“She was fishing yesterday to see if I would be up for giving it a go. She's attracted to my submissive personality but she lusts for the female form.“ rethinking it, she did ask him if he ever thought of being a women and he wasnt opposed. Plus when she gave him the vial she did indeed say its supposed to change male to female.

“My eyes widened as a bolt of inspiration struck me.

What if I wasn't the queen?” Damnit! I hoped it would be different but its been leading to this anyway with his Uber submissiveness..

"Losing your dick, though... It's the last remnant, are you sure?"

"You're worth it," I stated, voice firm despite my churning gut.“ To summarize, she changed him into a women/monster, he makes her more beautiful and gives her full control over himself, then removes his own dick to please her? This is bordering on insanity/worship and not submissiveness anymore lol. He already had the pussy she liked so why…

"We'll also spend some time talking about that something new I see in your pants and why you've been hiding it from me." She at least had the grace to blush. “ sigh why are all women in your otherwise amazing stories all liars.. she made him/her remove his without telling him about hers..

"Informed consent time Stephen. This is your last chance to say no and have me take you seriously. Otherwise, I'm gonna assume it's you playing or pushing my buttons." The silence hung heavy in the air.” Shes right hes teasing her and then begging /resisting not to do stuff like a 12 yr old child.

“This was the first time I had been this naked, this exposed, to another person in my entire life.“ oh so he was a virgin? No wonder hes acting so childlike.

"Stephen... trust me. Things will work out if you just let this happen. Relax." The last word fell over me with that little extra oomph that only she could provide.“ uhh finally.. shes behaving so normal and this dudes all the over place when its about himself yet so sure and determined when it comes to pleasing her.. another zombie…

“Take it slow. Take it slow take it slooOW.....

She penetrated me in one insistent push“ uh? What happened here lol.

“Just because she can do these things doesn't give her the right! ...Calm down. We're both learning, don't be angry at her without talking about it first.” Did she not throw him against the wall and fingerfucked him painfully? And now again..

“ A dancing bear that you could command as you pleased.” i dont get it? One point she says im at your mercy queen, you can overpower me as much as you want queen, hell she even gave Brie the control over her body when transforming her, she didnt even mind being thrown at the wall, but her cumming is where she drew the line? Where she felt like a toy.. sigh

This was incredibly well-written, I just have one critique:

You know the "show, don't tell" principle of storytelling?

In the beginning, all the good things about Brie were "told" as memories narrated by the main character, while all the things "shown" about her were that she was (perpetually) late, that she could dish out the banter but couldn't take it, that she made fun of things he disclosed for _her_ sake, ... Even her original text message comes with an "Really life? Already? You can't give me ten minutes to myself?" exclamation from the main character, immediately setting a negative tone.

Feeling the trust and their close friendship is very important for a story like this, and at least for me, Brie kind of set off alarm bells at the beginning that never completely went away.