- Group Sex
- Breathing Space
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All Comments on 'Breathing Space'
by Ian_Snow
- 25 Comments
A very fun story to read. I kinda want to read more about them in a possible sequel if you decide to do one.
5/5
Hi, here from the Nude Day contest. Great job bringing the characters to life and expressing their feelings there on the beach and afterward. The after hours activities were lots of fun, too. Great work!
Ian,
I just purchased your newest novel on amazon, and it was a disappointment. It pains me to say this because I like your writing. But more and more, it is always some dominating man and a submissive woman in your work. Give me a break! Do all your novels have be about man dominating the woman and telling her what to say, and treating her her like shit. The woman calling him "sir" or "mister"? this is garbarge. I hate mean romance, but a erotica can be erotica without this gibberish, where women have some sense of power and say. In this novel, within the opening pages, joy is treated a whore, by a pimp. I just deleted the novel after reading a few pages. Could not tolerate it.
Hey there! Thanks for giving it a shot and for the input. It's worth noting if you aren't aware there's a "Look Inside" feature on Kindle books that lets you read a sampling (I want to say it's 10% of the novel, but don't quote me on that). You can also request a return for books you don't like. I'm not sure what their policies are on that, but it's worth looking into if you feel the work isn't what you'd like. I try to balance releases between power fantasies and romances. Casting a wider net sometimes means readers are off-put by certain releases and that's too bad, but I also feel like my best writing is done when I write what appeals to me in the moment, not one particular genre or subgenre. Sorry that one wasn't for you, but stay tuned because there's a lot more coming.
Ian,
Thanks for the reply, and I did not want to return it because I want to support your writing. And since you are one of the very few authors on amazon and on literotica who can craft a story well. I have bought all your books, except the mind game one, even though I skipped the romances. just to clarify, I am NOT into romances. I am into swinger like stories, which you write so well. And I totally understand why you want to write the stories you want to write. But my only suggestion is you make the women characters strong, like the two mature professors, and they are not ones who simply submit to men. I personally find it hard to swallow when a man keeps pressuring a woman to say what he wants to hear. That reduces the character's depth, and then we dont really get to know that character uniqueness. So please consider making the women characters stronger. That is juts more sexy in my opinion.
Holy crap! Third place? Thank you all so very much for reading and voting (and commenting, for that matter). I'm ecstatic! You're the best. Yes, you!
This is the first story of yours I've read, and I really enjoyed it. Lusty and fun but with heart, too. And that's not always easy to do. You really knocked it out of the park with this one. 5 Stars!
Interesting story, and a little different. Really enjoyed it and congrats on your place in the contest.
Hey, thanks so much, folks! Got a lot of good writers to catch up on from that contest too.
Excellent story! Fun, loving, sexy. Thanks. I'll be checking out more of your works
There could be an entire second story with the great characters you've developed here.
What a great story, from the well-developed characters to the storyline that keeps moving. You're writing style is enjoyable and easy to read.
Please, MORE!
It really jumped the rails there at the ending with the house....kind of a wet fart to end an otherwise enjoyable read