I really like your main characters and the story you’re writing, seems more of a reflection closer to what would actually happen in this ‘fictional’ world. The relationship building is very good also.
I like Callie. She has the possibility of really adding some twists and turns in the drama. I am really looking forward to what you reveal/write.
Youthful, but without the stereotypical teenage angst where the young people are constantly over-reacting to trvial and immaterial concerns. Survivor's guilt is bothering him, as is natural, but it is not taking over his persona. Mike is demonstrating that he is stronger than he knows, while allowing himself to be vulnerable. Acepting Nathan's offer of support without rejecting help due to some misguided bravura is a sign of innate wisdom. Also, about an hour of good reading is so much more satisfying. Please continue!!!!!
Honestly, I was not expecting the whole coven thing but I can't say that I hated it. Love the lesbian mind control, especially with how slow burn it is.
Yep, it's a great story. Interesting partners. Seems like Mike is not that highly sexed. When I was a young man, I did the traveling carnival for a season. There was a young woman who joined that said she could handle any six of us. Two was more than she could handle.
So this on has this trans girl dreaming of being a cock sucking whore as well. I wonder if the Director would ever help a Trans Girl feel as good and fulfilled as the others I have read of him taking?
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What did you guys like the most from this story? And what would be small adjustments you would make? Tell me all about it!
I would pay everything I have for one of those!
the twist at the end, love it. Like other I hope there well be sequels
I really like your main characters and the story you’re writing, seems more of a reflection closer to what would actually happen in this ‘fictional’ world. The relationship building is very good also.
I like Callie. She has the possibility of really adding some twists and turns in the drama. I am really looking forward to what you reveal/write.
I am enjoying this story very much! Kelly Winters has a bright future on this website! 5 stars
Excellent. These first two chapters were probably the best I ever read.
Many thanks and five stars.
Not to an ass but Hawaii has one of the largest dairy farms. Had a teacher how used to go there every year
A cast list is sure handy when you bring someone like Nathan back in. I ended up going back to the first chapter when I encountered him.
You are a natural.
Thanks.
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Youthful, but without the stereotypical teenage angst where the young people are constantly over-reacting to trvial and immaterial concerns. Survivor's guilt is bothering him, as is natural, but it is not taking over his persona. Mike is demonstrating that he is stronger than he knows, while allowing himself to be vulnerable. Acepting Nathan's offer of support without rejecting help due to some misguided bravura is a sign of innate wisdom. Also, about an hour of good reading is so much more satisfying. Please continue!!!!!
Honestly, I was not expecting the whole coven thing but I can't say that I hated it. Love the lesbian mind control, especially with how slow burn it is.
This was great! Excited to read more
Yep, it's a great story. Interesting partners. Seems like Mike is not that highly sexed. When I was a young man, I did the traveling carnival for a season. There was a young woman who joined that said she could handle any six of us. Two was more than she could handle.
oh fuck
So this on has this trans girl dreaming of being a cock sucking whore as well. I wonder if the Director would ever help a Trans Girl feel as good and fulfilled as the others I have read of him taking?